- Hillsboro, OR, USA
- member since June 1, 2012
Cindy P’s last login was Saturday, October 27, 2012.
I am much touched and truly grateful to you for putting up such a terrific review.
I didn't describe the aliens in the first two chapters because I wanted them to be revealed to the reader at the same time as they were revealed to the protagonist. In this way, I was able to use four of the protagonist's (Matt's) senses to fully bring to life the initial horror of what they looked, sounded, smelt and felt like. There was no way that such a vivid description could have been woven into the first two chapters without breaking the golden rule of writing, "Show, don't tell". And in any case, it would have spoilt the surprise! I hoped that giving hints such as "his sensilla were twitching nervously" and "... the evaporant beginning to cool his cuticle ..." and "... his own footpads ..." would be enough to get the reader intrigued. Think about it - wasn't one of the reasons you wanted to keep reading, that you wanted to know what the Cryons looked like!
I hope that explains your really valid point.
With my kindest regards,