“A Pomegranate seed for my thoughts?
You can have them for free.
I read and liked Edghill's Queenmaker, and I'm a fan of biblical fiction. The story of Solomon and Sheba is only 13 verses of the bible. According to the author, "The great love story of Solomon and Sheba comes not from the Bible, but from three thousand years of romantic folklore...."
I'm not sure if Edghill's attempt was to stretch the 13 verses into 400+ pages, or if she was working off the legend, and at this point, I couldn't care less. This book was a hot mess.
Parts of the book were readable, and the issues I had with it were primarily poor decisions made by the author with regard to the structure of the book, not the story or the writing per se.
Such as:
A massive and rampant overuse of italics.
Multiple narrators - at least 15? One of them dead.
Dialog both anachronistic and trite
The various narrators had me constantly turning to the front to the book to try to figure out who was speaking. Was it Baalit or Bilqis? Abishag or Ahijah? I couldn't keep them straight. To add insult to injury, they all had redundant, whiny, italicized inner monolog. It got to the point where I started thinking in italics. i.e. King Solomon seems like a really good guy. (italics)Solomon sure is a good guy. It's too bad he has to be in this book.(/italics)
The other issue with the changing narrators is we were told everything twice. Baalit entered the Kings chamber. Change to POV Solomon, Baalit entered the chamber. Blah. Blah. Blah. Words with no purpose. It took 140 pages for Solomon and the Queen to even meet.
Readers were twice treated to "something" for thoughts ... "A pomegranate seed for your thoughts" - which I obviously cannot get over, and "a pinch of incense for your thoughts." Upon meeting the Queen Solomon proclaimed "Great minds think alike", and and one point one of the lesser (forgettable) characters started out their chapter with "Familiarity breeds content; so claimed an old proverb" - Hmmm ... Solomon was around somewhere between the 7th - 10th century (BC or BCE), and the quote - "Familiarity breeds CONTEMPT" is first documented in the first century AD or CE. Ergo --- not ancient at all, but futuristic.
That kind of mistake in writing and editing drives me bananas.
Nitpicking aside, this story could have stayed 13 verses in the bible, and I would have been perfectly content never to know it. The story was slow, the characters hard to distinguish from one another, and structure didn't work at all.
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