“Couldn't finish. Couldn't get into it with all the backstory thrown in right away and the "telling in quotes"
"He did want you to visit him when he had a business conference in Portland. You've never been to Oregon. Brad thought you'd enjoy the vacation."
Thank you, Captain Obvious. I'm sure she knows she's never been to Oregon.
But the kicker was, "I'm glad you're replenishing your body fluid, so you don't become dehydrated. You had to lose a lot of water from sweating so much." (this in casual conversation from a big sister to a 15 yr old) Who talks like this?”